根据提示和要求完成下面短文。
提示:
假如你是Hope Middle School的一名学生,请你用英语写一篇80个词左右的短文,向你的英国朋友介绍一下你们学校的概况(不得使用真实的人名、地名)。短文要包括以下几个方面的内容:(10分)
①校园(school campus);
②老师和同学;
③学习情况;
短文的第一句已经给出。
I am a student of Hope Middle School.____________________
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(2001年河北省中考题)
考生作文:
I'm a student of Hope Middle School.My school campus is very clean and beautiful.There is a garden in my school.And there are a lot of trees.My schools
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teachers are very busy and the students hard study.We have P.E.class every
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week.On the playground,you usually can see some boys play basketball.So they
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are very strong.Our playground isn't large.But I like it.Welcome to our school!
①应改为Our teachers,简单,明了。
②句子结构表达错误,应改为study hard。
③usually can改为can usually,频度副词应放在情态动词和行为动词之间。
④play应改为playing,see sb.do sth.意为“看见某人干了某事”;表示“看见某人在干某事”应用see sb.doing sth.。 (河北省一考生)
简评:
本文满分10分,该文章得分7分。文章只简单说明了要点,句子表达较通顺,但内容不够丰富、具体,而且还有少量的语言错误。
参考范文
I am a student of Hope Middle School.My School campus is big and beautiful.There are many tall trees,and beautiful flowers.There is also a playground in our school.
Our teachers are all very kind and friendly.They work hard and teach us very well.They take good care of us,and they are strict with us.
There are about 60 students in our class.We get on well with each other.We often study and play together.
At school,we learn many subjects,such as Chinese,maths and English.We try our best to learn them well.
I love my school because it's just like my home.